Did you know that on Friday, January 21, 2011, there was a 5th grade talent show? I t was 2 hours, from 6 to 8. All of the profits went to the OMSI overnight fieldtrip. This is a big deal for us, because without the talent show, we would have a lot less money than we have now.
The 5th graders had practiced a lot for this. There were more than 20 acts! One part I liked about the talent show was that the acts were mixed. There was some dancing, singing, instrument playing, and even a skit! Also, Ms. Tucker and Ms. Schulte, 2 fifth grade teachers, danced to the song “I Will Survive”. I bet that drew in a bunch of people. Ms. Tucker’s class even danced to Michael Jackson’s “Thriller”!
The talent show was a success, and we’re all glad that it was. We’re still planning to make more fundraisers, so we can raise more money. 5th grade teachers and students are working very hard for this field trip. After the talent show, we counted the money, and we made over 400 dollars! Let’s hope that all 5th grade classes get to go to the OMSI overnight field trip in May!
I like that you start with a question; that really gets readers hooked and engages them in what you are saying. It's great that you both describe some of the acts in the talent show, and also explain what you were fundraising for. I bet seeing your teachers dance was fun! When I was in school, the principal sang Somewhere Over the Rainbow while standing on a desk because my class won a contest. It was fun to watch!
ReplyDeleteCongratulations on the success of the talent show. I enjoyed reading your story. Just a minor items:
ReplyDelete1) You might like to mention it was 6 p.m. - 8 p.m. versus just 6-8.
Keep us posted about more fund raisers - best to all of you in your wonderful activities.
Awesome story. Your excitement just showed right through it. I'm so glad that you are enjoying school. The talent show sounded like so much fun and it raised a lot of money! ^_^
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job writing this story.
Love, Granny
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